ruts dug deep
Truth grows cold
lost and weary
The fire wanes
smoke to ashes
past and future
A moment denied
The spirit bleeds
12 thoughts on “Oblivion”
Wow. You are going to have me in love with poetry very soon. I love the cadence of this one. Like stepping through time.
It’s interesting that you say that . . . i’ve been reading Emily Dickinson lately. Perhaps her influence over me is stronger than I thought. 😉
Oooo, my plan to convert you to poetry is almost complete. Muhahahah! 😀
This is such a strong poem – it fairly screams at you. Beautiful
Thank you! I appreciate the compliment. 🙂
Thanks for reading!
I especially like the imagery: the fire wanes smoke to ashes. Nice!
Thanks! That was actually the last line I wrote. 🙂
“The spirit bleeds
This is heartbreaking (spirit-breaking?) and frustrating to me, but that’s amazing poetry. This is the dark one, yes? I love that last line, and the title just fits so well. Lovely and dark.
Yes, this is the dark I mentioned on your last piece, (which I hope everyone reads!). It was time to explore a different emotion, even it is a bit painful. Even darker emotions are beautiful as they are very human.
It took forever to get the title (that’s the part I struggle with the most) so thanks for giving it the thumbs up. Yay!
Beautiful… but so sad…
Yes, but in sadness we learn the power of joy. 🙂
Thanks so much for reading.
I enjoyed this. The rhythm worked very well.