The first challenge for the Fourth Writers’ Platform Building Campaign is up and running! The games begin with a round of flash fiction that follows these guidelines:
My muse and I came up with “The Call” for my entry. Hope you enjoy the read!
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The Call
Shadows crept across the wall as the months passed without a word. Leaves of summer cast gray silhouettes against faded paint. Barren branches of winter cut through moonlight and slice through the windowpane. Then, delicate petals arrive in spring and leave gentle imprints on the back of an empty chair. It’s been more than a year since someone sat in that seat.
Every morning, she wondered if the answer she needed would finally come. They kept telling her there was nothing she could do, but wait. So, wait she did with her cup of tea. She poured another and placed it in the space beside her. The steam swirled and curled into the air until it eventually disappeared. Worry lines etched new pathways around her eyes and forehead as the minutes of another day slipped away.
Tick. Tick. Tick.
She stared at the wall and begged for today to be the day. Any news is better than none after so much time of maddening silence. Her tea grew cold as an early spring sun warmed the afternoon. Amid the fragrance of orange blossoms in the air, the phone rang and everything faded.
(192 words)
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Be sure to check out all the other wonderful entries and vote for your favorites, here. I am #93.
c.b. 2012
I really enjoyed this. So melancholy, so hopeful, and yet..
Your first paragraph was eloquent and vivid. Beautifully written.
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Thanks! 🙂 I was hoping to play with a dual atmosphere and I’m happy to see it worked!
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Very haunting! I love your image of the steam curling. Great job!
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Thanks! 🙂
The steam curl came to me at 2 a.m. and I’m so glad it did!
Thanks for reading!
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I agree with Jenny. The atmosphere of the passage was cool and passive, yet still hopeful. Loved it. Great job!!
I’m entry #19
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Thanks! 🙂
I’ve always like the idea that there is hope in any situation.
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Excellent entry 🙂 Very descriptive but haunting at the same time
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Thanks! 🙂
I love a good adjective and sometimes I worry that I love them a bit too much!
Thanks for reading!
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The empty seat. One year. What a gripping piece. Well done.
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Thank you. 🙂
I put that line in at the last minute. I’m glad to hear it was a worthwhile addition.
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Nice imagery! I like it 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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All of the above! What a wonderful piece! It had me holding my breath in anticipation and the descriptions were beautiful. 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks so much for reading!
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“So, wait she did with a cup of tea.”
LOVE that. I love all your imagery. I felt like I was waiting through the seasons with her. And I’m dying to know what phone call she was waiting for!
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That was the first line that came into my head for the story! I structured the whole piece around that! 🙂
The fun part of being a writer is knowing everything that happens (I know what she’s waiting for and I know who finally called), but its also fun to let the reader to decide what happens. 🙂
Thanks for reading!
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Like it!!
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Thank you so much for reading! 🙂
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Nice work! I voted for you!
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Thanks! I appreciate the vote! 🙂
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Really good imagery! Nice work! 🙂
I’m #37
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Thank you very much! 🙂
Imagery is one of my favorite things to play with in storytelling!
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So I want to know who she is waiting for to call, and who are they? Loved this line, “The steam swirled and curled into the air until it eventually disappeared. Well done.
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Ah, that’s for each reader to decide. I like to write in a way that allows each individual to fill in the holes for themselves. 🙂
Glad you liked the tea steam line – it’s one of my favorite.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting. 🙂
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Aww so sad! This made me think of a war bride whose husband was MIA. So many possibilities though! Nice job!
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Thanks! 🙂
Yes, its a little sad, but there is twinge of hope hidden in there, too. 🙂
Thanks so much for reading.
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Stunning imagery! Sad, lonely, but optimistic. Hard to pull off all at once! Awesome!
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Thanks! 🙂
I was hoping to get two polar opposite emotions to mesh and its nice to hear it’s working. 🙂
Thank you for reading!
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I love the feel of this! So melancholy. Great descriptions. I’m stalking you from the campaign!
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Thanks! I never met an adjective I didn’t like! 🙂
I’m stalking you, too!
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A cup of tea can really solve all problems and dilemmas – I’ve imagined what she’s waiting for but I doubt very much that it’s right – I loved this piece – I’m a new campaigner #91
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Thank you! I’d love to know your interpretation. Part of the fun of this piece is hearing about how readers perceive this woman’s situation. 🙂
I’m on my way to check out your entry. Thanks so much for reading! 🙂
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Very nice, C.B. I ‘m happy to have voted for you. 🙂
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Thank you! I appreciate it. 🙂
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What a fun exercise! Love your writing…vivid, sensory!
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Thank you! I love to play with the senses – I think I got all five in this one! 🙂
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I liked the line “Worry lines etched new pathways around her eyes and forehead.” Very compelling piece.
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Thank you! 🙂
I’m glad you enjoy it and thanks so much for reading!
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Really nice job here, C.B.! Great imagery and it allows for open interpretation. Well done! Off to vote! 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂 Imagery is so much fun to play with, isn’t it?
Thanks so much for the vote – I really appreciate it. 🙂 I voted for yours, too!
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I really liked it! Would love to read a second installment . . . great descriptions!
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Thanks! 🙂 It was a fun piece to write, but I don’t know if it’ll go any further. I like the mystery and I’m hesitant to solve it outright. 🙂
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Love your imagery! Good Job!
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Thank you! 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
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Very well written, and so sad…I feel like that call isn’t going to be pleasant…but maybe not!
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Thank you! 🙂
As the reader, you get to decide the ending. Have fun! 😉
Thanks so much for reading!
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Intriguing! I wonder who’s calling…
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Thanks so much for reading! 🙂
I know who’s calling, but I won’t tell. It will remain a lovely mystery you get to solve.
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Whoa – very suspenseful! I want to know more about what is going on. You’ve got my vote!
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Thanks! I appreciate the vote! 🙂
This story could go so many different ways! I know the background I created, but the guesses of readers so far has been very inspiring in taking it in a different direction. 🙂
Thanks so much! 🙂
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This made me think of a war bride too, but it could be good news just as easily as bad news, right? Right? Mine is #71 but i’m pretty sure you already read it.
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Right. 😉
I loved your story! In fact, it got my vote. 🙂 And congrats for making it into the second round! That’s awesome.
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Very poetic and beautiful, really captures a sense of being frozen in time. I like your descriptions of the seasons.
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Thanks! I knew I wanted to do something with seasons when I got the prompt. 🙂
Thanks so much for reading! 🙂
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This piece was really effective in conjuring up a visual image and a mood of anticipation. I thought of parents waiting for news of a missing child, or of a woman waiting for news of a missing soldier. Very poignant.
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Thank you! Mood is one of my favorite things to play with and I’m happy to hear it worked out in this piece.
Thanks so much for reading! 🙂
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If my own muse weren’t so morbid, I’d try to make that call good news, but it is a futile effort, lol! Great job, C.B., can’t wait to see what else you pull out for the campaign 🙂
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Thank you! I really enjoyed your story, too. It was great to get a glimpse into your WIP. 🙂
I just saw the hint for the next challenge and I’m anxious to see what’s in store.
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really nice imagery. Hope it’s the call she was expecting.
Tale Spinning #58
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Thanks. 🙂 You get to decide who’s on the other end of the line!
Looking forward to checking out your story!
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Loved your imagery. I felt like I was there.
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Thanks! 🙂 My favorite thing to hear is that a reader felt like they were in the room.
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How sad! I hope the phone call was good news and not bad!
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It can go either way – some days I go with the original intent and other days I decide the opposite. 😉
Thanks so much for reading!
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Nicely done! Love how you set the reader right into the space!
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Thanks! 🙂
Mood and atmosphere are my favorite things to play with in a story. 🙂
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